Week 8 Assignment – REVISION OF WORK: post entry on how to develop hypertext photo story (or other piece if preferred).
‘Waiting’ is a hypertext photo story that is designed to take the reader on a journey they don’t realise they are being taken on, to create links that make the reader think they are making the decisions.
What works well
- Breaking conventions as this sort of ‘make your own decision’ stories would normally be childrens fiction.
- leading the reader through a story.
- friendly tone talking about a somber event.
- potential to develop further.
Weak areas
- providing links off the main text but don’t have a great relevence to the main text.
- not deep enough- need to create links off of the links.
- picture needs to be more prominent on the title page.
- needs more pictures throughout the links.
Summary
In this peice, i am trying to create a ‘choose your own path’ story where the reader feels as though they are creating the end of the story when in reality they are being led to a particular conclusion. I believe it works well in leading the reader through a story and the links i have so far create another dimension to the story. I think the picture needs to be more prominant on the opening page, and i could create more links, and more options for the reader. I could also include more pictures throughout.
careful with your spelling Matt – a few typos (use the spell checker in the WordPress editor).
I think there are some good insights here. I agree that the main ‘picture postcard’ picture would be more powerful if bigger, not sure of the need for more – the point being that this is an important picture of something now changed (the reader imagines how). It sort of represents the change in the character’s life perhaps.
I”m not sure this is a ‘choose your own adventure’ type story, or needs to be. It certainly is a story with a twist in the tale – which I think you could make even more of (see my comment on the story). The use of more links – perhaps flashbacks (or forwards) would be interesting, agree.
I do think you pinpointed ‘what works well’ successfully, especially the tone and the concern for the reader.
Katharine